In the past, I always thought peer editing and peer response were both the same thing. I would try to find punctuation that needed to be corrected and was always afraid to say anything too critical. After reading this excerpt by Straub, it became clearer to me that editing and revision were two separate things. Editing is all about punctuation and errors while revision is all about content. Staub focuses the arrangement, pacing, and sentence style. When I have " revised" papers in the past, I focused on editing. I feel like one can proof read a paper and still edit it. Editing consist mainly of grammar, structure, clarity, punctuation, and spelling. Revision consist mainly of quality, style, ideas, context, opinions, and suggestions. I feel like I struggle revising or editing my own paper. This class has taught me that giving your paper to a classmate, friend, or even reading it aloud is better than revising it alone. It's also important to remember by giving your paper to a classmate or a friend, you are able to see how one responds to your paper. If they understand, if they don't understand, what you can elaborate on. It's all important for a revised paper.
2) Writing we hold dear,
I honor the place in you
where the whole universe resides
I honor the place
of love, of light, of truth, of peace
I honor the place within you where
If you are in that place in you,
and I am in that place in me,
there is only one of us.
Namaste
Ram Dass
This quote reminds me of yoga, specifically it reminds me of being in savasna. The first time I heard this quote my instructor was guiding the class out of savasna. This quote makes me feel at peace. It gives me a warm feeling and makes me feel connected to the world.
I feel like I really expanded further in my paper of "writing that moves you." I was able to list what specific writing techniques that were used. I feel like I did well on this assignment. I feel like being able to write about it in class, kind of like a draft really helped me with the finished paper. Each writing we have completed in this class I feel connected too, which I really enjoyed.
Throughout time I have heard people quote words and phrases. Some stay with me longer than others and of course there are ones that I am particularly fond of. It seems the more I travel and the more open my mind is, the quality and meaning of words change. Some words are so beautifully wound together, I think their meant to be shared with each other.
I am not an athlete and never will I ever be able to achieve any athletic ability. I am however flexible and a good listener.This difference led me to yoga. Yoga has changed my perspective on life. Yoga has pushed me through several states of depression and fatigue. I began taking classes my senior year of high school. I have never felt more welcome in a crowded room of strangers than I did at Albemarle Pilates and Yoga. when you open your eyes and your heart in a crowded room full of people who are also letting their guard down, you all connect. It has to be one of my most cherished feelings.
One of my instructors is known for always closing savasana with a quote of some sort. I remember the first time I heard the Ram Dass quote. My heart was just beginning to slow down from an intense hot yoga class. I still had thoughts spinning in my head. They were much louder with the stillness and quietness of the room. What I was thinking of i’m not quite sure. I am sure I was stressed or worried, most likely both. I hear my instructors voice, quickly it silences my own thoughts. She reads,
“ I honor the place in you where the entire universe resides
I honor the place
of love, of light, of truth, of peace.
I honor the place within you where
If you are in that place in you
and I am in that place in me,
there is only one of us.
I opened my eyes. I felt as if I was being baptized. I am a very emotionally driven person and when I heard this quote for the first time, goosebumps swam over me. I knew then, this wasn’t just an hour a day where I could escape from daily tasks. It was more. It was my escape from self hatred, shame, from greed, hate,jealousy,illness, from everything evil around me. When I heard the quote I felt connected. I felt I had a purpose and I was finally moving in the right direction. Sometimes I still walk through life trying to find purpose and meaning. We can all feel so little and so minuscule when we are in the world. When I find myself in these positions, I try so hard to remember that my suffering seems so much heavier when I am alone. I try to guide myself out of it. We are all on a path. Mine may be different than yours but our paths have crossed for some reason. I do not claim to be religious or know a great deal about religion in general but when I do yoga I feel spiritual. It is my therapy and my faith of choice.
Ram Dass has lots of wonderful quotes. This one is his definition of Namaste, which is always said at the ending of savasana. From reading more about Ram Dass, he is a well known buddhist in the 60’s and this specific quote is practiced a lot in Western yoga classes. I think the meaning of this quote and namaste are to celebrate and accept each other. We are both humans, both unique, and here to respect each other. We should stray from being divided and manifest as one. If we dissect the quote, some literary terms come into play. The quote seems to be an apostrophe, meaning that the words are addressing someone who is absent or imaginary and as if they were capable of understanding. This imaginary person could be you or me. Beginning in line three there is the start of an asyndeton, “ I honor the place in you which is of love, of truth, of light, of peace,” There also is the usage of assonance. The beginning of every line starts with I...honor the place. He uses an antimetabole by repeating in a reverse order, “ I honor the place within you where If you are in that place in you and I am in that place in me..”. All of these literary devices are important and function together to make the reader feel as if he/she is being directly spoken to. All these add up to make this quote memorable.
3) What is your understanding of the term rhetorical situation?
I'm probably going to be very wrong. I know what a rhetorical question is, one that doesn't need an answer. If I remember correctly, rhetoric is how you write/talk in different situations and the word choice you are use to.
So, I was't entirely wrong. Rhetoric is how meaning is ascribed to artifacts, ideas, situations and that there is never a non-rhetorical use of language. Aristotle defined it as, " the available means of persuasion". When we watched the muppets/communism video online it really made rhetoric easier for me to understand. I feel like teachers in the past give you definitions and expect you to go from there. Seeing a video and being able to discuss it was really helpful.
Rhetoric involves...
Situation: what else is going on with a text aside from words.
Occasion: what ever motivates you to write.
Purpose: the effect you wish to have on your intended audience.
Audience
Mode, Medium, Genre: Communication such as oral, visual, digital, or print. Within the medium of genres there are different genres( wedding toast, debates, etc.)
context: think about the author, place of publication, the ongoing conversation.
4) What would you leave as a legacy instead of a lecture...
Personal Creedo, Time capsule, Video, or blog. I chose this journal entry because it helped me a lot in getting my thoughts down for the final personal creedo, which turned into the This I Believe paper.
-importance of family.
-being open minded
-being honest
-hold friends close
-comparing yourself to others
-never be afraid to learn
- hold your childhood dear
-respect others in order for them to respect you.
- there is no perfect being.
- being unique is the most important attribute to have.
5) What Makes for a good argument? Why is it important to consider rhetoric when you are making an argument?
- I think a good argument always takes both sides into consideration, still thinking of the other side.
-A good argument is clear, without badgering the other side.
- Concise
- being able to give facts supporting evidence for your opinion.
-being able to relate to your audience
-confidence in speaking
-knowledgable
-be interesting/ animated
I think a good argument, means having true premises. The more relatable and the more evidence you have to support your argument the better validity you will carry. It is important to include ample amount of facts that support your overall argument or belief statement. We tend to accept arguments even if they aren't valid, whether it be from the internet or in advertising.
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